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I am currently living in a dorm. therefore, i think i would have to say that my home is located in university. as you know, my place is owned by the school, so i cannot make the interior's change by myself. what i am trying to talk about is that my room's interior is quite plain. moreover, it is so cramped that there isn't enough room to move around. because of that, sometimes i feel like i am stuck in a rabbit hutch. however, none of them really matters to me, cuz i can do whatever i feel like. considering i am currently a student, i don't have that much money. compared to renting a studio apartment, living in a dorm is much cheaper. i mean, it's truly affordable. it really make my wallet easy. i hope i can stay here until my graduation ceremony.

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Hi, Gilbert!
Thank you for telling me about your room. Great job with the sentence structures. Just take note of the minor corrections we've made.
- T. Caitlyn
I am currently living in a dorm. 
>> CORRECT
therefore, i think i would have to say that my home is located in university. 
>> Therefore, I think I would have to say that my home is located on the university campus.
as you know, my place is owned by the school, so i cannot make the interior's change by myself. 
>> As you know, my place is owned by the school, so I cannot make any changes to the interior myself.
what i am trying to talk about is that my room's interior is quite plain. 
>> What I¡¯m trying to say is that the interior of my room is quite plain.
moreover, it is so cramped that there isn't enough room to move around. 
>> CORRECT
because of that, sometimes i feel like i am stuck in a rabbit hutch. 
>> CORRECT
however, none of them really matters to me, cuz i can do whatever i feel like. 
>> However, none of that really matters to me because I can do whatever I feel like.
considering i am currently a student, i don't have that much money. 
>> CORRECT
compared to renting a studio apartment, living in a dorm is much cheaper. 
>> CORRECT
i mean, it's truly affordable. 
>> CORRECT
it really make my wallet easy. 
>> It really makes things easier on my wallet.
i hope i can stay here until my graduation ceremony.
>> CORRECT
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