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People might think I am wired.
But I think Olympic didn't make good relationship among the countries.
There is a few countries that get award medal.
Most of them are wealthy.
The other countries people can feel lack of something among the strong countries.

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Ms. Sunny!
In the past, the purpose of the Olympics is "camaraderie" which is to build good relationships among countries. However, for some athletes and countries who don't have sportsmanship, it became a competition, showing which country is better in one area.
Good day ahead!
T. Aki~


People might think I am wired.
>>> People might think I am weird.

But I think Olympic didn't make good relationship among the countries.
>>> But I think the Olympics didn't create good relationships among the countries.

There is a few countries that get award medal.
>>> There is a few countries that get award medals.

Most of them are wealthy.
>>> CORRECT!

The other countries people can feel lack of something among the strong countries.
>>> The other countries people can feel a lack of something among the strong countries.

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