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When I laugh or smile, I forget some stress and have a positive attitude. I think that laughter is a good way to relieve stress and trigger a positive feelings. And when we laugh, our brains produce more good hormones such as endorphins. Laughter can influence the motor area of brain. It is reported that laughter stimulates our brains and improves our immune system. I agree absolutely that 'Laughter is the best medicine '.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I completely agree with you on this! I think laughter can lessen stress and trigger our 'happy hormones.' Also, if we have a healthy and happy feeling, I think it is less likely that we will have illnesses or diseases.
- T. Caitlyn
When I laugh or smile, I forget some stress and have a positive attitude. 
>> CORRECT
I think that laughter is a good way to relieve stress and trigger a positive feelings. 
>> I think that laughter is a good way to relieve stress and trigger positive feelings.
And when we laugh, our brains produce more good hormones such as endorphins. 
>> When we laugh, our brains produce more beneficial hormones, such as endorphins.
Laughter can influence the motor area of brain. 
>> Laughter can influence the motor area of the brain.
It is reported that laughter stimulates our brains and improves our immune system. 
>> CORRECT
I agree absolutely that 'Laughter is the best medicine '.
>> I absolutely agree that 'laughter is the best medicine'.
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