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When I was young, my conutryside community had good custom. If someone happened good things, we congratulated each other. If someone happened bad things, we helped each other. If someone very sicked couldn't work all most in community people helped him. My countryside although weren't rich but we were happy. Now lately countryside only living old people. Old people can't help each other. This is reality of our countryside.

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Hi Eva, 

Thank you for sharing your memories of your countryside community. It's heartwarming to hear about how everyone used to come together to help and support one another. It sounds like those were special times filled with kindness and community spirit. It's a bit sad to hear that things have changed, with mostly older people living there now. Your story highlights the importance of community and the challenges that come with changes over time. 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

When I was young, my conutryside community had good custom.  

>>When I was young, my countryside community had good customs. 

If someone happened good things, we congratulated each other.  

>>If some good things happen, we congratulate each other. 

If someone happened bad things, we helped each other.  

>>If some bad things happen, we help each other. 

If someone very sicked couldn't work all most in community people helped him. 

>>If someone was very sick and couldn't work, almost everyone in the community would help him. 

My countryside although weren't rich but we were happy.  

>>In my countryside, we were happy, although we weren't rich. 

Now lately countryside only living old people.  

>>Now, only old people have been living in the countryside lately. 

Old people can't help each other.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Old people couldn¡¯t help each other. 

This is reality of our countryside. 

>>This is the reality of our countryside. 

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