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The positive side of peer pressure

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I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?". I think peer pressure is beneficial.
First, we can grow through competition with peers. According to study, friends of honors students show better growth than friends of inferior students.
Second, Good faith competition can be a source of joy and satisfaction. When we achieve our goals, we feel proud and accomplished, and we can increase our confidence and self-esteem.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and reasons.

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Hi, Hana! Thanks you for sharing your ideas. They say, we become what we surround ourselves. So it is imperative to know what kinds of people we hang out with. I appreciate your input every time. Please take care, and see you again!
--Teacher Anji


I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?". I think peer pressure is beneficial.
I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?" I think peer pressure is beneficial.
First, we can grow through competition with peers. According to study, friends of honors students show better growth than friends of inferior students.
First, we can grow through competition with peers. According to a study, friends of honor students show better growth than friends of less successful students.
Second, Good faith competition can be a source of joy and satisfaction. When we achieve our goals, we feel proud and accomplished, and we can increase our confidence and self-esteem.
Second, good-faith competition can be a source of joy and satisfaction. When we achieve our goals, we feel proud and accomplished, and we can increase our confidence and self-esteem.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and reasons.

In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable facts and reasons.

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