¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What was the most interesting place you have ever visited?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ¸Í*¿µ
2024-08-19 322

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I don't have much experience oversea travel.
Last year, My family and i went to Hong Kong for winter vacation.
We visited many cities. Among them, Makao was so amazing.
There are a lot of giant hotel and many luxury store.
At night, We saw wonderful night view of Makao. Maybe I can't forget that.
And there is a casino on the 1floor of the hotel. The casino was opened 24hours.
I didn't visit there because i don't like gamble.
Go to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many building is so nice experience.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Jun!
It sounds like you had a blast. ^^ Please tell me more about your travels next time. :)
~ Teacher Trixia

Content:
I don't have much experience oversea travel.
- I don't have much experience with overseas travel.
Last year, My family and i went to Hong Kong for winter vacation.
- Last year, my family and I went to Hong Kong for winter vacation.
We visited many cities. 

- We visited many cities.

Among them, Makao was so amazing.
- Among them, Macao was so amazing.
There are a lot of giant hotel and many luxury store.
- There are a lot of giant hotels and many luxury stores.
At night, We saw wonderful night view of Makao. 

- At night, we saw a wonderful night view of Macao.

Maybe I can't forget that.
- Maybe I can't forget that.
And there is a casino on the 1floor of the hotel. 

- And there is a casino on the first floor of the hotel.

The casino was opened 24hours.
- The casino was open 24 hours a day.
I didn't visit there because i don't like gamble.
- I didn't visit there because I don't like to gamble.
Go to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many building is so nice experience.
- Going to Makao is so expensive, but watching a huge view of many buildings is such a nice experience.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
136346 Is there any holiday in other countries that you wish Korea were... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 165
136345 How important is your hairstyle to you, and why? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 364
136344 \"The greatest risk is to risk nothing at all.\" ÀÓ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 355
136343 Once Aristotle said : \"To avoid criticism say nothing, do... ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 276
136342 election ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 183
136341 What can you do better when you are alone? Write at least two... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 282
136340 homework ±è*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 159
136339 Describe a friend who has played an important part in your life. ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 213
136338 If you could choose, would you prefer to be the oldest sibling,... ¹Ú*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 207
136337 Advice for those who want to marry ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 191
136336 What foreign food do Koreans enjoy? ±è*¿í ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 249
136335 The researcher\'s life ÀÓ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 422
136334 Page.48 ±è*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 1
136333 April 17th\'s homework ¾È*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-12 202
136332 Homework Àå*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 373
136331 Are video games good for you? Why? Á¤*Æò ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 170
136330 Which is better: experiencing a story through a movie or delving... Á¤*Æò ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 1
136329 homwork À¯*¸° ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 312
136328 1. Do you prefer Television or Books? State your opinion clearly... Á¤*Æò ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 203
136327 What is the best book you have read? Why? Á¤*Æò ¿Ï·á 2024-04-11 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04