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The smart phone is my most important gadget nowadays.
I can take photos and videos using my smart phone in concert or music festivals.
And I can buy merchandise by using mobile payment.
Also It is necessary to communicate with my family and friends by phone.

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Hi there, Min!

Our smartphones no matter what brand it may be are the most powerful and convenient gadgets we possess and bring along anytime, anywhere.

As you have emphasized the usage and pragmatic ways we utilize them in our daily lives, there is no doubt that it is the most remarkable gadget that we need to possess.

Thus, handle your smartphone with care. Do not forget to sanitize it sometimes.

Below, we can see that all your sentences are correct. Maintain this accuracy at all times especially in your speech.

See you!

-T. Donna~

The smart phone is my most important gadget nowadays.
>> Correct!

I can take photos and videos using my smart phone in concert or music festivals.
>> Correct!

And I can buy merchandise by using mobile payment.
>> Correct!
Or: And, I can also buy merchandise by using mobile payment.

Also It is necessary to communicate with my family and friends by phone.
>> Correct!
Or: Also, It is necessary to communicate with my family and friends by phone.
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