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i graduated public educational institutions at my hometown, anyang. however, i think i didn't concentrate their classes at that time. instead i concentrated on private educational institutions such as english kindergarten or math academy. so nowadays in university, i have some difficulties in following classes, since i have'nt studied with tons of students like now. but, you know, it is my responsibility to get great grades for getting good job, so i am working hard to get used to studying with many students. fortunately, i think when next year comes, you can say that i am another class in understanding what professor says like michael jordan in basketball court. not only university classes, i am also preparing some licenses. i am trying hard and i hope i can get master grades on both of them.

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i graduated public educational institutions at my hometown, anyang. 
>> I graduated from public educational institutions in my hometown, Anyang.
however, i think i didn't concentrate their classes at that time. 
>> However, I think I didn't concentrate on their classes at that time.
Instead I concentrated on private educational institutions such as English kindergarten or math academy. 
>> CORRECT
so nowadays in university, i have some difficulties in following classes, since i have'nt studied with tons of students like now.
>> So nowadays in university, I have some difficulties in following classes, since I haven't studied with as many students as I do now.
 but, you know, it is my responsibility to get great grades for getting good job, so i am working hard to get used to studying with many students. 
>> But, you know, it is my responsibility to get great grades to secure a good job, so I am working hard to adapt to studying with many students.
fortunately, i think when next year comes, you can say that i am another class in understanding what professor says like michael jordan in basketball court. 
>> Fortunately, I think by next year, you¡¯ll see that I will have improved to a higher level in understanding what the professor says, like Michael Jordan on the basketball court.
not only university classes, i am also preparing some licenses. 
>> CORRECT
i am trying hard and i hope i can get master grades on both of them.
>> I am trying hard and hope to achieve high grades in both areas.
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