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How do you think having a household helper can impact family life?

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First, I want to make it clear that the Filipino women who came to Korea this time did not come to work as household helpers, but to take care of children.
In Korea, these women are called caregivers.
In Korea, there are no live-in household helpers, and part-time household helpers are common.
Part-time household helpers make short-term visits to elderly homes or dual-income families to help with cleaning, laundry, and meal preparation.
On the other hand, caregivers take care of children in the homes of young dual-income couples for 4 or 8 hours a day and only do tasks related to raising children, such as preparing meals for the children.
In Korea, increasing the birth rate is a national task.
In a situation where most women have jobs, many couples gave up on having children because they could not find caregivers for their children.
I hope that the caregivers from the Philippines will help increase the birth rate in Korea and help young children learn English.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Hump Day, Sun! 

Professional housemaid services provide hands-on health care, do errands, prepare meals, and clean homes for elderly persons and people with disabilities or diseases, allowing owners to live as independently as possible in their own homes.

- Kristine ^^ 

First, I want to make it clear that the Filipino women who came to Korea this time did not come to work as household helpers, but to take care of children.
>> First, I want to make it clear that the Filipino women who came to Korea this time did not come to work as household helpers but to take care of children.
In Korea, these women are called caregivers.
>> Correct.
In Korea, there are no live-in household helpers, and part-time household helpers are common.
>> Correct.
Part-time household helpers make short-term visits to elderly homes or dual-income families to help with cleaning, laundry, and meal preparation.
>> Part-time household helpers provide short-term assistance with cleaning, laundry, and meal preparation to elderly homes or dual-income families.
On the other hand, caregivers take care of children in the homes of young dual-income couples for 4 or 8 hours a day and only do tasks related to raising children, such as preparing meals for the children.
>> On the other hand, caregivers spend four to eight hours a day with the children in their homes of young couples with two incomes, and they solely perform duties associated with childrearing, such cooking meals for children.
In Korea, increasing the birth rate is a national task.
>> Increasing the birth rate is a national priority in Korea.
In a situation where most women have jobs, many couples gave up on having children because they could not find caregivers for their children.
>> Many couples gave up on having children because they could not find babysitters in a world where the majority of women are working.
I hope that the caregivers from the Philippines will help increase the birth rate in Korea and help young children learn English.
>> Correct.
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