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How do you respect the privacy of all the members of your family?

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I think that everyone respected the privacy. Especially about family. Sometime family don't protect privacy, Because we live to together, know each other. We often think my family don't need the privacy. I also didn't think about my son's privacy. Because l thought my son's are too little, I have to care of them. My thinking was wrong. Now I don't see son's phone and i wait for them to tell me.

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Hi Eva,

Thank you for doing your homework. It's true that living together can sometimes blur the lines of privacy, especially when it comes to children. Recognizing that your sons need their own space and privacy is an important step. Waiting for them to share things with you rather than checking their phones shows that you trust them and respect their boundaries. It¡¯s clear that you¡¯re a thoughtful and caring parent who is always looking out for your family's well-being. The way you're handling this shows a lot of maturity and understanding. Keep up the great work, you¡¯re doing an excellent job!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think that everyone respected the privacy.

>>I think that everyone should respect each other's privacy.

Especially about family.

>>Especially in the family.

Sometime family don't protect privacy, Because we live to together, know each other.

>>Sometimes, family doesn¡¯t respect privacy because we live together and know each other so well.

We often think my family don't need the privacy.

>>We often think that family doesn't need privacy.

I also didn't think about my son's privacy.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I didn¡¯t consider my son¡¯s privacy either.

Because l thought my son's are too little, I have to care of them.

>>Because I thought my sons were too young, I felt I had to take care of them.

My thinking was wrong.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I realized my thinking was mistaken.

Now I don't see son's phone and i wait for them to tell me.

>>Now I don't check my son's phone; I wait for him to tell me instead.

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