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Describe the effects social media has on young adults.

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In this day and age, the impact of social media on young people is extremely clear. While there are good effects, there are also bad effects.
There are two main positive effects.
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First, it can have an effect good things.
>>Firstly, it can have a positive effect.
It's that the influence of social media posted by someone can return to a huge response and unexpectedly have a good impact on society.
>>It is that the influence of social media posts made by someone might generate huge reactions and unexpectedly have a positive impact on society.
OR
>>It's possible for a social media post to have a significant and unexpected positive impact on society due to its influence.
Second, it's the delivery of information.
Because information can be found and delivered easily and quickly, there is nothing like the dictatorship era to hide and remove something and situation. Therefore, social negative work or corruption can be greatly reduced.
There are three main negative effects.
First, it's fake news.
With the development of social media, it becomes easier for many people to access, which leads to the prevalence of fake news and frequent damage to someone by manipulating videos.
Second, it affects crime easily.
Social media can be an environment that can easily be cruel and criminal for young people because it's accessible from anywhere. In Korea, it's also a problem because youth frequently trade drugs through social media.
Third, it's easy to become addicted.
Because it's accessible anytime, anywhere, you can become addicted to social media by constantly encountering it without your knowledge.
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