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What was the most popular music when you were 12 years old, what is popular now, and how have the mu

작성자: 이*희
2024-08-08 465

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When I was 12years old, ballad style music was popular. At that time we didn't have computer, imternet and smart phone. We listened music through radio, TV and singer's albums. Our family are very poor so coundn't buy albums. I only listened to musics on the radio. Now I don't knew lately musics. Lately musics very fast and unique. I can't understand it. Lately I like trot. Tort is our country traditional pop. When I was child old people liked tort. I feel like I was old,because l like tort.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Eva,

Thank you for sharing your memories about music from when you were 12 years old. It's great to hear how ballad music was popular during your childhood, and how you enjoyed listening to it through the radio and TV. It’s interesting to see how music trends have changed over time, with today's music being fast and unique. It’s also nice to know that you appreciate trot music now, which connects you to your country’s traditional pop. You're making good progress, so keep up the great work!

~Teacher Cathy

 

When I was 12years old, ballad style music was popular.

>>When I was 12 years old, ballad-style music was popular.

At that time we didn't have computer, imternet and smart phone.

>>At that time, we didn't have computers, internet, and smartphones.

We listened music through radio, TV and singer's albums.

>>We listened to music through radio, TV, and singer's albums.

Our family are very poor so coundn't buy albums.

>>My family is very poor so we couldn't buy albums.

I only listened to musics on the radio.

>>I only listened to music on the radio.

Now I don't knew lately musics.

>>Now, I don't know much about the latest music.

Lately musics very fast and unique.

>>Lately, music is very fast and unique.

I can't understand it.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I don't understand it.

Lately I like trot.

>>Lately, I've been liking trot.

Tort is our country traditional pop.

>>Trot is our country's traditional pop music.

When I was child old people liked tort.

>>When I was a child, older people liked trot.

I feel like I was old,because l like tort.

>>I feel like I'm old because I like trot.

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