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The negative side on \" Should people become vegetarian? \"

작성자: 손*희
2024-08-08 356

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I'm Hana, presenting my opinion on "Should people become vegetarian?". Do you like vegetables? Actually, vegetable is a food you either love it or you hate it. There are so many heated debates about vegetarian. I think people don't have to become vegetarian.
First, we should respect one's preference. I agree with some the opinions that there are some people who likes vegetables, but there are people who has allergy in vegetables such carrots and tomatoes. I think we should consider their own preference and situation.
Second, the opinion that people should become vegetarian is forceful. Of course, people shouldn't eat meats only because it can be bad in our health. In the same way, all people shouldn't become vegetarian because if people only eat vegetables, people can have a disease such protein deficiency.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable examples and reasons.
Thank you for reading.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Great job Hana! You were able to present and support your ideas well. I am excited to discuss with you about another topic soon. See you!
--Teacher Anji



I'm Hana, presenting my opinion on "Should people become vegetarian?". 
>> I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Should people become vegetarian?"
Do you like vegetables? 
>> CORRECT
Actually, vegetable is a food you either love it or you hate it. 
>> Actually, vegetables are a type of food you either love or hate.
There are so many heated debates about vegetarian. 
>> There are many heated debates about vegetarianism.
I think people don't have to become vegetarian.
 >>Personally, I think people don't have to become vegetarian.
First, we should respect one's preference. 
>>First, we should respect individual preferences.
I agree with some the opinions that there are some people who likes vegetables, but there are people who has allergy in vegetables such carrots and tomatoes.
 >>I agree with some opinions that while some people like vegetables, others may have allergies to certain vegetables, such as carrots or tomatoes.
 I think we should consider their own preference and situation.
>> I believe we should consider each person's preferences and circumstances.
Second, the opinion that people should become vegetarian is forceful. 
Second, the opinion that everyone should become vegetarian is somewhat forceful. 
Of course, people shouldn't eat meats only because it can be bad in our health.
>>Of course, people shouldn't eat only meat, as it can be harmful to our health. 
In the same way, all people shouldn't become vegetarian because if people only eat vegetables, people can have a disease such protein deficiency.
>>Similarly, not everyone should become vegetarian because if people only eat vegetables, they may develop health issues such as protein deficiency.
In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable examples and reasons.
Thank you for reading.

>>In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable examples and reasons.

Thank you for reading.

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