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Do you enjoy making snacks at home, or do you prefer buying them from the store? What snacks do you

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2024-08-05 191

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When I was in school, my mother used to make rice cakes and Korean traditional cookies for me.
However, these days, most Koreans buy snacks from stores and eat them.
In my case, I have experience making snacks for my children when they were young. Children tend to prefer snacks made by their parents rather than store-bought snacks.
When my children were young, I made them so-called “rice cake skewers.”
How to make it is very simple.
It is made by putting rice cakes fried in oil on a skewer. In addition to rice cakes, fruits such as strawberries are also added, and sometimes seafood is added.
I have a fond memory of my youngest daughter enjoying the “rice cake skewers” ​​I made.
Since the heat wave continues these days, I sometimes make refreshing fruit salads.
I put finely chopped fruits such as watermelon and strawberries in a large bowl, add milk, ice, and a little sugar to create a refreshing and sweet fruit salad.
It's very easy to make, so I can do it or my daughterts can do it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun! 

Thank you so much for doing your homework! See you tomorrow~ 

- Kristine ^^ 

When I was in school, my mother used to make rice cakes and Korean traditional cookies for me.
>> Correct. 
However, these days, most Koreans buy snacks from stores and eat them.
>> However these days, most of Koreans purchase and consume snacks from stores.
In my case, I have experience making snacks for my children when they were young. 
>> Correct. 
Children tend to prefer snacks made by their parents rather than store-bought snacks.
>> Children typically make their own snacks rather than purchasing premade ones from the shop.
When my children were young, I made them so-called “rice cake skewers.”
>> Correct. 
How to make it is very simple.
>> It is quite easy to make.
It is made by putting rice cakes fried in oil on a skewer. 
>> Correct. 
In addition to rice cakes, fruits such as strawberries are also added, and sometimes seafood is added.
>> Together with rice cakes, other ingredients may include fruits like strawberries and at times fish.
I have a fond memory of my youngest daughter enjoying the “rice cake skewers” ​​I made.
>> I have a fond memory of my youngest daughter enjoying the rice cake skewers I made.
Since the heat wave continues these days, I sometimes make refreshing fruit salads.
>> I occasionally make cool fruit salads because the heat wave is still quite strong these days.
I put finely chopped fruits such as watermelon and strawberries in a large bowl, add milk, ice, and a little sugar to create a refreshing and sweet fruit salad.
>> I put finely chopped fruits such as watermelon and strawberries in a large bowl and added milk, ice, and a little sugar to create a refreshing and sweet fruit salad.
It's very easy to make, so I can do it or my daughterts can do it.
>> It's very easy to make, so I can do it or my daughters can do it.
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