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Final remarks of \" Should homework be banned?\"

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I'm Hana presenting my final remarks of "Should homework be banned?". If you are students, you may have homework. I'm going to talk about its presence.
First, It brings families closer together. If there is proper mediation between parents and children, homeworks become necessary. For example, if I promise to do my math homework 2 pages, my mom can give me some snacks.
Second, Homework is necessary because it can help a student take responsibility. As you know, responsibility is very important component in society. In teen, we should grow it by doing homework because we are a preparatory members in society.
In conclusion, I end my remarks to present my opinion to use some reliable examples and reasons. Thank you for reading.

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HI, Hana! Congratualtions for the job well done! You were able to sum up your opinions about homework. I am glad to know that students like you are still  interested in doing homework. Please keep it up. See you!
--Teacher Anji


I'm Hana presenting my final remarks of "Should homework be banned?".
>>
I'm Hana, presenting my final remarks on "Should Homework Be Banned?".
If you are students, you may have homework.
 >> CORRECT
 I'm going to talk about its presence.
 >>I'm going to talk about its significance.
First, It brings families closer together.
>>First, homework brings families closer together.
 If there is proper mediation between parents and children, homeworks become necessary.
>> If there is proper mediation between parents and children, homework becomes necessary.
 For example, if I promise to do my math homework 2 pages, my mom can give me some snacks.
>> For example, if I promise to do two pages of my math homework, my mom can give me some snacks.
Second, Homework is necessary because it can help a student take responsibility.
>>Second, homework is necessary because it helps students take responsibility.
As you know, responsibility is very important component in society.
>>As you know, responsibility is a very important component of society.
In teen, we should grow it by doing homework because we are a preparatory members in society.
>> As teenagers, we should develop it by doing homework because we are preparatory members of society.
In conclusion, I end my remarks to present my opinion to use some reliable examples and reasons. Thank you for reading.
>>In conclusion, I end my remarks by presenting my opinion, supported by reliable examples and reasons. Thank you for reading.



 


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