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One day in television, I saw a bunch of people were fishing in the ocean. I had an interest but never thought about going to the fishing shop and actually buy equipments. So I ran down to the shop and talked to the shop manger about which fishing type may suit me the most. In these days, the fishing is one of my most interesting activity I can never stop

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Hello, Paul!
Your stories are always fun that it makes me want to try these things too, someday! Keep up the good work!
~Teacher Selene 

One day in television, I saw a bunch of people were fishing in the ocean. 
>>I was watching the television one day when I saw a bunch of people who were fishing in the ocean. 
I had an interest but never thought about going to the fishing shop and actually buy equipments. 
>>I was already interested but I never thought about going to the fishing shop and buy the equipment.
So I ran down to the shop and talked to the shop manger about which fishing type may suit me the most. 
>>So, I ran down to the shop and talked to the shop manager about which fishing type may suit me best. 
In these days, the fishing is one of my most interesting activity I can never stop
>>These days, fishing is an interesting activity I can never seem to stop doing. 
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