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Have you ever had a dream that seemed impossible?

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Yes. And now I got the dream that seemed impossible. Let me explain That is mean. When I was single before the marriage, I want to marriage with ture love. But It's look like very difficult for me. Because I don't have confidence to looking for perpect partner. Before met my wife, I already experiece of dating with several women. They are very good womens except me. We are not good talker and listener to eachother.

So, I praied to jesus, 'Please, I want to marriage, I want to meet perpect partner like share one's life. But, If jesus think It's not time to marriage, I understanding your choice. And I consertrate on you.'

So, I was finding the big church to consertrate jesus and to sharing the story of jesus with my life. And I moved the church recomended by my freind. And so, finally I met my wife.

Important is when we consertrate on jesus, we can reiceve everything that I needed.

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Thank you, Steve, for putting in the effort on the homework and providing such a thorough and detailed answer. I'm pleased to see you pushing your limits and contributing your ideas.
~~Teacher Ryka^^

Yes. And now I got the dream that seemed impossible.
>> Yes, and now I have achieved a dream that once seemed impossible. 

Let me explain That is mean.
>> Let me explain what I mean.

When I was single before the marriage, I want to marriage with ture love.
>> Before I got married, I dreamed of marrying my true love. 

But It's look like very difficult for me. Because I don't have confidence to looking for perpect partner.
>> However, it seemed very difficult because I lacked the confidence to find the perfect partner. 

Before met my wife, I already experiece of dating with several women.
>> Before meeting my wife, I had dated several women. 

They are very good womens except me. We are not good talker and listener to eachother.
>> They were wonderful women, but we struggled to communicate effectively with each other.

So, I praied to jesus, 'Please, I want to marriage, I want to meet perpect partner like share one's life.
>> So, I prayed to Jesus, saying, "Please, I want to get married and meet the perfect partner to share my life with. 

But, If jesus think It's not time to marriage, I understanding your choice. And I consertrate on you.'
>> But if Jesus thinks it's not the right time, I will understand your choice and focus on you."

So, I was finding the big church to consertrate jesus and to sharing the story of jesus with my life. 
>> I then sought a large church where I could concentrate on Jesus and share his story with my life. 

And I moved the church recomended by my freind. And so, finally I met my wife.
>> A friend recommended a church, and it was there that I finally met my wife.

Important is when we consertrate on jesus, we can reiceve everything that I needed.
>> The important lesson is that when we focus on Jesus, we can receive everything we need.

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