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One of the most memorable times with my mother was when my brother and I were alone at home.

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We were 7 and 10 years old, living on a high floor of a building. The lock on the main door was very stiff and difficult to unlock, even for an adult. Despite being told not to touch the lock, I was eager to challenge myself and ended up locking the door but couldn¡¯t unlock it, no matter how hard I tried.

My grandma was visiting us but couldn¡¯t get in and waited for over two hours outside our apartment. She called a locksmith who tried to unlock the door through the newspaper slot but failed. When my mother came home from work, she couldn¡¯t do anything either and had to call 911. The paramedics arrived with a fire truck and ladder, climbed up to the 16th floor, and I opened a window for them.

I mention this story because it¡¯s the moment I felt most sorry for my mother. After a long day at work, she came home to this stressful and frustrating situation, and I felt terrible for causing her so much trouble. This experience taught me the importance of listening to my parents.

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Hi, MJ! I guess you learned your lesson the hard way from this story. Thank you for sharing such a memorable experience from your childhood. Enjoy your day! ^^
~T. Jewel
One of the most memorable times with my mother was when my brother and I were alone at home.
>>One of the most memorable times with my mother was when my brother and I were alone at home.
We were 7 and 10 years old, living on a high floor of a building.
>>When we were 7 and 10 years old, we lived on a high floor of a building.
The lock on the main door was very stiff and difficult to unlock, even for an adult.
>>The lock on the main door was very stiff and difficult to unlock, even for an adult.
OR
>>The main door¡¯s lock was so stiff and difficult to unlock that even adults struggled with it.
Despite being told not to touch the lock, I was eager to challenge myself and ended up locking the door but couldn¡¯t unlock it, no matter how hard I tried.
>>Despite being told not to touch the lock, I was eager to challenge myself and ended up locking the door. No matter how hard I tried, I couldn¡¯t unlock it.
My grandma was visiting us but couldn¡¯t get in and waited for over two hours outside our apartment.
>>My grandma was visiting us but couldn¡¯t get in and ended up waiting outside our apartment for over two hours.
She called a locksmith who tried to unlock the door through the newspaper slot but failed. 
>>She called a locksmith, who tried to unlock the door through the newspaper slot but was unsuccessful.
Then my mother came home from work, she couldn¡¯t do anything either and had to call 911.
>>When my mother came home from work, she couldn¡¯t open the door either and had to call 911.
The paramedics arrived with a fire truck and ladder, climbed up to the 16th floor, and I opened a window for them.
>>The paramedics arrived with a fire truck and ladder, climbed up to the 16th floor, and I opened a window to let them in.
I mention this story because it¡¯s the moment I felt most sorry for my mother.
>>I mention this story because it was the moment I felt the most sympathy for my mother.
After a long day at work, she came home to this stressful and frustrating situation, and I felt terrible for causing her so much trouble.
>>After a long day at work, she came home to this stressful and frustrating situation, and I felt terrible for causing her so much trouble.
This experience taught me the importance of listening to my parents.
>>This experience taught me how important it is to listen to my parents.
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