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Which vice do you think would be the most difficult to get rid of? - simi

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I think 'the temptation of money' is the most difficult thing. In the past, strong men or high classess were the power. However, during this generation, Money is the only thing of important.
While living in the world, there are lots of reasons of life. Some think happy is important, to others, honor, healthy, relationships.....
but nobody can recognize that the money is not important in life.
Additional, people got fallen in front of the money. It is sad story but it's true. Who say lie in the many situation, Who cheat in the market,,,,so we thought it was great that a person who didn't obey to money.

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Hello, Sir Sammy! Thank you and I appreciate your time and effort for sharing your thoughts on this matter. 
-T. Sonny 
I think 'the temptation of money' is the most difficult thing. 
>>I think, money temptations is the most difficult thing.
In the past, strong men or high classess were the power. 
>>In the past, influential men or the elite were powerful.
However, during this generation, Money is the only thing of important.
>>However, in this generation, money is the only thing  that is important.
While living in the world, there are lots of reasons of life. 
>>In our whole existence,  there are a lot of reasons to live.
Some think happy is important, to others, honor, healthy, relationships.....but nobody can recognize that the money is not important in life.
>>Some think happiness is important; honor, health and relationships for others. But nobody recognizes that money is not important in life.
Additional, people got fallen in front of the money. 
>>Additionally, people's weakness is money.
It is sad story but it's true. 
>>It is the sad truth.
Who say lie in the many situation, Who cheat in the market,,,,so we thought it was great that a person who didn't obey to money.
>>Money makes people lie in many situations, cheat in the market, so we must realize that it would be great if a person do not worship money.
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