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How long should a person stay in a cafe before he/she goes out to give the seat to other people?

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A few months ago, The News in Korea announced issues. The owner of stores said that if someone stay in a cafe too long, we have loss sales.
I also agree with their opinion.

I thinks that the clients should have a manner using the stores.

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Hi, Mun!

Thank you for answering your homework. 

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. A few months ago, The News in Korea announced issues. 
>>A few months ago, The News in Korea announced these issues.

2. The owner of stores said that if someone stay in a cafe too long, we have loss sales.
>>The owners of these stores said that if someone stays in a cafe for too long, they have some loss in sales.

3. I also agree with their opinion.
>>CORRECT!

4. I thinks that the clients should have a manner using the stores.
>>I think that the clients should have manners when using the stores.

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