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Do you think snorkeling is a suitable activity for all ages? Why or why not?

작성자: 박*호
2024-07-22 867

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I have never experienced snorkeling, but I have seen it a lot on TV and in movies and heard about it from my friends, so I have some knowledge about it.
In conclusion, I think snorkeling is a suitable activity for people of all ages.
Snorkeling is an activity where you float on the surface of the water and use a snorkel to breathe and look into the water.
Therefore, snorkeling does not require any special equipment other than a snorkel, and you can enjoy it even if you don't know how to swim.
On the other hand, scuba diving involves going deep into the water using air tanks and a special breathing machine, so you must be able to swim and be healthy enough to withstand the pressure of deep water.
Therefore, scuba diving is not suitable for children or the elderly.
Snorkeling is a water activity that anyone can enjoy in shallow waters.
I want to go to Cebu, Philippines, known as the most famous snorkeling destination, and enjoy snorkeling soon.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun! 

Snorkeling can be a suitable activity for a wide range of ages due to its accessibility and adaptability. It doesn't require strenuous physical activity, making it feasible for children and older adults alike, provided they are comfortable in water and can swim. The equipment needed is minimal and lightweight, and snorkeling can be enjoyed at varying levels of depth and difficulty, accommodating both beginners and more experienced individuals. However, personal health considerations and understanding of safety measures are essential to ensure a safe and enjoyable experience for everyone participating in snorkeling.

- Kristine ^^ 

I have never experienced snorkeling, but I have seen it a lot on TV and in movies and heard about it from my friends, so I have some knowledge about it.
>> Although I have never gone snorkeling, I do have some information about it because I have seen a lot of footage of it on TV, in movies, and from friends.
In conclusion, I think snorkeling is a suitable activity for people of all ages.
>> To sum up, I think that snorkeling is a fun leisure for individuals of all ages.
Snorkeling is an activity where you float on the surface of the water and use a snorkel to breathe and look into the water.
>> When snorkeling, you float on the water's surface and use a snorkel to look down and breathe.
Therefore, snorkeling does not require any special equipment other than a snorkel, and you can enjoy it even if you don't know how to swim.
>> Therefore, snorkeling only requires a snorkel and works well for people who are not good swimmers.
On the other hand, scuba diving involves going deep into the water using air tanks and a special breathing machine, so you must be able to swim and be healthy enough to withstand the pressure of deep water.
>> However, scuba diving requires you to descend far below the surface of the water using air tanks and a specialized breathing apparatus, so you need to swim and in adequate condition to tolerate the pressure of the deep water.
Therefore, scuba diving is not suitable for children or the elderly.
>> Scuba diving is therefore not recommended for young children or the elderly.
Snorkeling is a water activity that anyone can enjoy in shallow waters.
>> Correct.
I want to go to Cebu, Philippines, known as the most famous snorkeling destination, and enjoy snorkeling soon.
>> I hope to go snorkeling soon and visit Cebu, Philippines, which is the world's most popular snorkeling location.
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