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I have always dreamed of working in my company beacuse this compay is a clothing compay. I hope to work there because my first compay is fabric compay. People who work there are more professional. I hope to work with professional corworker.

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Hi, Ms. Nami! I am glad to know that you still prefer to work with your current company. It must be better than it seems to be. Professionalism is also on top of my list when it comes to choosing the place to work. 


I have always dreamed of working in my company beacuse this compay is a clothing compay. 
>>  I have always dreamed of working in my company because this company is a clothing company. (spelling corrections)
I hope to work there because my first compay is fabric compay. 
>> I hope to work there because my first company was a fabric company. 
People who work there are more professional. 
>> CORRECT
I hope to work with professional corworker.
>> I hope to work with professional coworkers.
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