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I think best manner is Not forcing them to eat fast when they eat. Korean people, whether they are busy or not, always like to be fast. They don't like to wait. I went to eat with my coworker near the office. The food was served and they ate quickly without saying a word. But as soon as they finished eating, they left without saying a word. I still hadn't finished eating, but I had to put down my spoon and follow them.
Wait until others finish eating It's the best table manners not to force eating quickly.They need to consider the other person

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                                        Which culture do you think has the best table etiquette? Why?


I think best manner is Not forcing them to eat fast when they eat. 
>> I think the best manner is not forcing them to eat fast when they eat. 

Korean people, whether they are busy or not, always like to be fast. 
>> Korean people like to do things fast whether they are busy or not. 

They don't like to wait. 
>> OR: They dislike waiting. 

I went to eat with my coworker near the office. 
>> For instance, I ate out at a restaurant near the office with my colleagues. 

The food was served and they ate quickly without saying a word. 
>> When the food was served, they ate quickly without saying a word. 

But as soon as they finished eating, they left without saying a word. 
>> And as soon as they finished eating, they left, still, without saying a word. 

I still hadn't finished eating, but I had to put down my spoon and follow them.
>> CORRECT~~

Wait until others finish eating It's the best table manners not to force eating quickly. 
>> Letting others finish eating before leaving or not forcing them to eat quickly is the best table etiquette for me. 

They need to consider the other person
>> OR: They need to consider the other people at the table.  

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