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What matters to you the most, intelligence or physical appearance?

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In my personal opinion, I think intelligence is more important, but in Korea, physical appearance is still more important.
In Korea, appearance is the first part to see someone. That's why the word "First impression" came into being.
Many people judge handsome and pretty enough to make out first impression a prejudice.
But I think intelligence is more important than physical appearance.
This is because I think there are many things you can do if you are intelligent.(exception for crime.)
If you're intelligent and find something important that no one else has found, you might win a Nobel Prize of become a great person to shake up the academic world, right?
So, if you think your appearance is bad, why not consider plastic surgery by making a lot of money from your intelligence?
And I also want people to put more importance on enhancing their inner beauty than their appearance.

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Hello, Yun!~
I love your response, and you struck me with your reasoning in the last part of your piece... You did a good job of expressing your thoughts.
Chammy
In my personal opinion, I think intelligence is more important, but in Korea, physical appearance is still more important.
>> In my personal opinion, I think intelligence is important, but in Korea, physical appearance is still more important.
In Korea, appearance is the first part to see someone. That's why the word "First impression" came into being.
OR
>> In Korea, appearance is the first thing people notice about someone, which is why the concept of "first impression" is so significant.
Many people judge handsome and pretty enough to make out first impression a prejudice.
>> Many people judge based on looks, which can lead to prejudiced first impressions
But I think intelligence is more important than physical appearance.
This is because I think there are many things you can do if you are intelligent.(exception for crime.)
If you're intelligent and find something important that no one else has found, you might win a Nobel Prize of become a great person to shake up the academic world, right?
So, if you think your appearance is bad, why not consider plastic surgery by making a lot of money from your intelligence?
And I also want people to put more importance on enhancing their inner beauty than their appearance.
>> Correct
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