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Do you think it is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job?

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I think that enjoying job is more important than making a lot of money. When I was a child, I learned how to successed. It was that, Today's pain will be tomorrow's glory. It means that I should invest in today for tomorrow, never enjoy today, and make a goal for my furture. If I achieve the goal, I am a success person. However, my life continues even after I achieve the goal. My teacher didn't tell me about life after achieving the goal. I think that now is most important in my life. Living while enjoying my current job is most important in my life.

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Hi, Hwanny! I can see that you put a lot of effort into your work, and it shows! Please focus more on correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Spend a little extra time each day practicing the areas where you had difficulties.

- Teacher Angela



I think that enjoying job is more important than making a lot of money. 
>> I believe that enjoying your job is more important than earning a lot of money.

When I was a child, I learned how to successed. 
>> When I was a child, I learned how to succeed.

It was that, Today's pain will be tomorrow's glory. 
>> It was said that today's pain will be tomorrow's glory.

It means that I should invest in today for tomorrow, never enjoy today, and make a goal for my furture. 
>> It means that I should invest in today for tomorrow, not just enjoy today, and set goals for my future.

If I achieve the goal, I am a success person. 
>> If I achieve the goal, I am a successful person.

However, my life continues even after I achieve the goal. 
>> CORRECT

My teacher didn't tell me about life after achieving the goal. 
>> CORRECT

I think that now is most important in my life. 
>> I think that the present moment is the most important in my life.

Living while enjoying my current job is most important in my life.
>> The most important thing in my life is living while enjoying my current job.










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