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Q: How does the past help us make sense of the present?
A: I think it helps us make the sense by making mistakes.
If people make mistake and look back, they would find the point where they did wrong, and they'll try to avoid doing it afterwards.
Also, people can do better when they encounter the repeated situation.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. Enjoy your weekend!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some corrections:

1. I think it helps us make the sense by making mistakes.
>>I think it helps us make sense by making mistakes.

2. If people make mistake and look back, they would find the point where they did wrong, and they'll try to avoid doing it afterwards.
>>If people make mistakes and look back, they will find the point where they did wrong, and they'll try to avoid doing them afterwards.

3. Also, people can do better when they encounter the repeated situation.
>>CORRECT!


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