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I believe that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer.

When people become adults, I think childhood memories have a lot of influence.
So people who are frustrated or depressed by a single failure are more likely to be poor.
The rich have faith and hope for the future that they will do well even if they suffer from failure.
I think this reason comes from their rich heart and relaxation.

So, I think that the reality of not trying because there is no hope and expectation for the future makes poor get poorer, and that rich minds, leisure, and rich bundles of money make rich get richer.

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Hi Da Hye,

Great job! You explained your thoughts clearly and provided insightful reasons. Understanding how experiences shape our lives is crucial. Keep thinking deeply about these topics and continue your excellent progress!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I believe that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe that rich people get richer and the poor become poorer.

When people become adults, I think childhood memories have a lot of influence.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Childhood memories greatly influence people when they become adults.

So people who are frustrated or depressed by a single failure are more likely to be poor.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Those who get frustrated or depressed by a single failure are more likely to stay poor.

The rich have faith and hope for the future that they will do well even if they suffer from failure.

>>CORRECT

OR>>On the other hand, the rich maintain faith and hope for the future, believing they will succeed even after a failure.

I think this reason comes from their rich heart and relaxation.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I think this mindset comes from their rich hearts and sense of relaxation.

So, I think that the reality of not trying because there is no hope and expectation for the future makes poor get poorer, and that rich minds, leisure, and rich bundles of money make rich get richer.

>>So, I think that the reality of not trying, because there is no hope and expectation for the future, makes the poor get poorer, and that rich minds, leisure, and wealthy resources of money make the rich get richer.

 

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