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What do you think of people who engage in extreme sports?

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It totally depends on people¡¯s personality whether people engage in extreme sports or not.

I think people who engage in extreme sports are kind of a challenging person. Since most of energetic people like extreme sports, I like their energy and passion. And I am also a person who engage in extreme sports. Also people can feel a sense of accomplishment that makes them to increase a self-esteem in their life.

However, since extreme sports usually let us to use our body, It could be very dangerous. Especially, it makes people more excited and challenge to a harder mission. In my case, I have been injured several times when I did surfing and snowboarding.
So, I love people who engage in extreme sports but always It needs to be careful !

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Hello, Yura! Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this matter. I appreciate the effort you put into your homework. Have a good day! ^^
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It totally depends on people¡¯s personality whether people engage in extreme sports or not.
>>It totally depends on people's personality whether they engage in extreme sports or not.
I think people who engage in extreme sports are kind of a challenging person.
>>I think people who engage in extreme sports are people who like challenges.
Since most of energetic people like extreme sports, I like their energy and passion.
>> I like the energy and passion of people who are into extreme sports.
And I am also a person who engage in extreme sports.
>>I am also interested in extreme sports.
Also people can feel a sense of accomplishment that makes them to increase a self-esteem in their life.
>>These people can feel a sense of accomplishment that boosts their self-esteem.
However, since extreme sports usually let us to use our body, It could be very dangerous.
>>However, since extreme sports usually involve the use of our bodies, they could be very dangerous.
Especially, it makes people more excited and challenge to a harder mission.
>>They make people more excited and challenge themselves to undertake harder missions.
In my case, I have been injured several times when I did surfing and snowboarding.
>>In my case, I have been injured several times while surfing and snowboarding.
So, I love people who engage in extreme sports but always It needs to be careful !
>>So, I love people who engage in extreme sports but they always need to be careful!
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