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I agree to a certain extent that spending a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing can be beneficial for overcoming the stress of everyday life, but it is not the best way for each individual. Firstly, In modern society, constantly connected world, there is a pervasive culture of busyness. This leads to high levels of stress and burnout. Taking time to do nothing without any specific activity can provide mental break. It allows the mind to relax, unwind and recharge which can help in reducing stress levels. Moreover, moments of idleness can stimulate creativity and problem-solving abilities. When the mind is not occupied with external tasks, it has the freedom to wander and make novel connections. This can be particularly valuable for individuals engaged in creative or intellectual pursuits. However, the effectiveness of doing nothing as a stress relief strategy may vary from person to person. In conclusion, it can be a valuable strategy for managing stress, its effectiveness depe

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I agree to a certain extent that spending a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing can be beneficial for overcoming the stress of everyday life, but it is not the best way for each individual. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Firstly, in modern society, constantly connected world, there is a pervasive culture of busyness.
>>> Firstly, in modern society, [constant] connected world [has] a pervasive culture of busyness. 
This leads to high levels of stress and burnout. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Taking time to do nothing without any specific activity can provide mental break.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It allows the mind to relax, unwind and recharge which can help in reducing stress levels.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Moreover, moments of idleness can stimulate creativity and problem-solving abilities.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 When the mind is not occupied with external tasks, it has the freedom to wonder and make novel connections.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 This can be particularly valuable for individuals to be engaged in creative or intellectual pursuits.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 However, the effectiveness of doing nothing as a stress relief strategy may vary from person to person. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In conclusion, it can be a valuable strategy for managing stress, it's effectiveness depends...
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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