¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Ȳ*ÇÏ
2024-07-05 322

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I agree to a certain extent that spending a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing can be beneficial for overcoming the stress of everyday life, but it is not the best way for each individual. Firstly, In modern society, constantly connected world, there is a pervasive culture of busyness. This leads to high levels of stress and burnout. Taking time to do nothing without any specific activity can provide mental break. It allows the mind to relax, unwind and recharge which can help in reducing stress levels. Moreover, moments of idleness can stimulate creativity and problem-solving abilities. When the mind is not occupied with external tasks, it has the freedom to wander and make novel connections. This can be particularly valuable for individuals engaged in creative or intellectual pursuits. However, the effectiveness of doing nothing as a stress relief strategy may vary from person to person. In conclusion, it can be a valuable strategy for managing stress, its effectiveness depe

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi there MR. HWANG!~!^^ It's truly impressive to observe your unwavering passion and dedication in finishing your written assignments! Keep refining your vocabulary prowess even further.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree to a certain extent that spending a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing can be beneficial for overcoming the stress of everyday life, but it is not the best way for each individual. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Firstly, in modern society, constantly connected world, there is a pervasive culture of busyness.
>>> Firstly, in modern society, [constant] connected world [has] a pervasive culture of busyness. 
This leads to high levels of stress and burnout. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Taking time to do nothing without any specific activity can provide mental break.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It allows the mind to relax, unwind and recharge which can help in reducing stress levels.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Moreover, moments of idleness can stimulate creativity and problem-solving abilities.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 When the mind is not occupied with external tasks, it has the freedom to wonder and make novel connections.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 This can be particularly valuable for individuals to be engaged in creative or intellectual pursuits.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 However, the effectiveness of doing nothing as a stress relief strategy may vary from person to person. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In conclusion, it can be a valuable strategy for managing stress, it's effectiveness depends...
>>> CORRECT~!^^
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
137068 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 79
137067 homework 05.09 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 183
137066 What kind of bedroom would you want to have at your age?... Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 325
137065 What do you think is the most beautiful color of eyes? Why?... Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 257
137064 Conscious ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 125
137063 Do you like eating cookies? Why? ÃÖ*ÇÑ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 528
137062 HOMEWORK È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 247
137061 hw ¹Ú*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 196
137060 Describe how middle schools have their school graduation. ¿À*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 0
137059 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 207
137058 Today\'s homework ÀÌ*µµ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 99
137057 My favorite food ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 222
137056 present ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 177
137055 HW ±è*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 0
137054 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 119
137053 How do you understand the statement: ¡°Beauty is skin deep¡±? Ȳ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 300
137052 please write your expectations from the class and from the... ¿À*¼Ø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 2
137051 Which are more useful, legs or arms? ÃÖ*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 1
137050 I use the sentence words ½Å*Áö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 147
137049 homework ÀÌ*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-09 163

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04