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Why do some people lack clarity about their true life goals?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-07-03 751

회원님의 영작문

Well, it's a matter of deep thinking.
Because in Korea, even young children lack clarity and cannot easily answer true life goals or dreams.
I think there are two main reasons.
First, people don't think they've thought clearly about their life goals.
When they were young, they may have made a choice based on the principle of majority vote, set their life goals, but they may not have grasped them accurately, or they may not have tried because they did nont have a specific plan.
Second, the goals of life may not be set to match the current social atmosphere.
This seems to have something to do with the social atmosphere as well.
Korea is an infinitely competitive society, and there is an implicit atmosphere in which we have to act according to our age.
Even if they want to set a life goal, they can't set it due to work or competition, or even if they set a life goal, they have a lot of other things to do, so they have a lack of clarity because they have lack of priorities.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
I completely agree that when we were young, our goals were influenced by others or trends, comparable to the second explanation you stated. I really think that our surroundings really influence our lives, thus it's better to know who you are without comparing. Focus on yourself so you learn what you want in life and where you need to grow. 
Chammy
Well, it's a matter of deep thinking.
OR
>> Well, it requires careful consideration.
Because in Korea, even young children lack clarity and cannot easily answer true life goals or dreams.
OR
>> Because even young children in Korea struggle to answer questions about their real goals and life ambitions.
I think there are two main reasons.
First, people don't think they've thought clearly about their life goals.
>>Correct
When they were young, they may have made a choice based on the principle of majority vote, set their life goals, but they may not have grasped them accurately, or they may not have tried because they did nont have a specific plan.
>> When they were young, they may have made a choice based on the principle of majority vote and set their life goals, but they may not have grasped them accurately, or they may not have tried because they did not have a specific plan.
OR
>>When they were younger, they might have established their life goals and made a decision based on the idea of majority belief, but they might not have fully comprehended them or might not have attempted because they lacked consciousness.
Second, the goals of life may not be set to match the current social atmosphere.
This seems to have something to do with the social atmosphere as well.
Korea is an infinitely competitive society, and there is an implicit atmosphere in which we have to act according to our age.
Even if they want to set a life goal, they can't set it due to work or competition, or even if they set a life goal, they have a lot of other things to do, so they have a lack of clarity because they have lack of priorities.
>>Correct
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