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Do you think the government should always check the prices and quality of products sold at stores an

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I think the government should always check the prices and quality of products, but it's not easy.
Most of the stalls don't have enough energy and water.
Also, they are not registered in the government management lists.
So when something happens, customers can suffer damage.
If the government checks basic matters, it can reduce the damage.
However, if they have to prepare many things, the prices will be high.
By the way, I think safety is more important than price.

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Hi, MK!
I can really see your improvement when it comes to written English. Keep it up! Also, that is correct; even though the government needs to monitor them, it is quite impossible. Hopefully, they can maintain safety and quality of their products even without monitoring.
- T. Caitlyn
I think the government should always check the prices and quality of products, but it's not easy.
>> CORRECT
Most of the stalls don't have enough energy and water.
>> CORRECT
Also, they are not registered in the government management lists.
>> CORRECT
So when something happens, customers can suffer damage.
>> CORRECT
If the government checks basic matters, it can reduce the damage.
>> CORRECT
However, if they have to prepare many things, the prices will be high.
>> CORRECT
By the way, I think safety is more important than price.
>> CORRECT
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