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Do you think it\'s good to have a big family?

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I think it's good. Because not lonely, it's fun and have big house.
Played with my family it's fun and not lon1ely The house is big because many family members in there.

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                                      Do you think it's good to have a big family?


I think it's good. Because not lonely, it's fun and have big house.
>> I think it's good because it¡¯s not lonely; it's fun and the family can live in a big house.

Played with my family it's fun and not lon1ely
>> If I had a big family, it would be fun and  I wouldn¡¯t be lonely. 

The house is big because many family members in there.
>> The house is big because many family members are living there. 
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