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Who are some famous figure skaters from history, and what made them memorable?

작성자: 박*호
2024-06-28 969

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Figure skating was not a popular sport in Korea.
Although there is winter in Korea, it is not as cold as Eastern Europe or Canada, where ice sports are popular, so winter sports are not as popular.
So, other than Korean female skater Yuna Kim, I don't know much about famous world-class figure skaters in history.
Yuna Kim was a gold medalist at the 2010 Vancouver Winter Olympics.
She is of great significance in that she is the first gold medal winner at the Winter Olympics, coming from Korea, where winter sports were not very popular.
After she won the Olympic gold medal, there was a figure skating boom in Korea, and many children dreamed of becoming figure skaters like Yuna Kim.
In addition, Yuna Kim is said to be the first figure skating athlete to achieve the Grand Slam in the women's singles category in the four major international competitions (Winter Olympics, World Championships, Four Continents Championships, and Grand Prix Final).

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Sun!

Thank you for doing your homework. Please check the corrections and alternative sentences given. Enjoy your weekend!

- Kristine ^^ 

Figure skating was not a popular sport in Korea.
>> Correct. 
Or >> Figure skating isn't a commom sport in Korea. 
Although there is winter in Korea, it is not as cold as Eastern Europe or Canada, where ice sports are popular, so winter sports are not as popular.
>> Winter sports are not as popular in Korea as they are in Eastern Europe or Canada. Although winter exists in Korea, the temperature isn't as low as other countries.
So, other than Korean female skater Yuna Kim, I don't know much about famous world-class figure skaters in history.
>> Therefore, I don't know much about well-known, elite figure skaters from history, except the Korean female skater Yuna Kim.
Yuna Kim was a gold medalist at the 2010 Vancouver Winter Olympics.
>> Correct. 
She is of great significance in that she is the first gold medal winner at the Winter Olympics, coming from Korea, where winter sports were not very popular.
>> She was especially notable since she was the first Korean to win a gold medal at the Winter Olympics, despite the country's lack of popularity for winter sports.
After she won the Olympic gold medal, there was a figure skating boom in Korea, and many children dreamed of becoming figure skaters like Yuna Kim.
>> Yuna Kim's Olympic gold medal caused a figure skating craze in Korea, as many young people aspired to be like her.
In addition, Yuna Kim is said to be the first figure skating athlete to achieve the Grand Slam in the women's singles category in the four major international competitions (Winter Olympics, World Championships, Four Continents Championships, and Grand Prix Final).
>> Furthermore, Yuna Kim is reportedly the first figure skater to win all four of the main international championships (the Winter Olympics, World Championships, Four Continents Championships, and Grand Prix Final) in the women's singles category.
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