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Q: What are the things that make people tired physically and mentally?
A: The things that make people tired physically is the hard works.
Every people have their limit in their physical energy, and if they try to do more than that, they'll feel tired.
And there is a lot of things that make people tired mentally.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes to remember:

1. The things that make people tired physically is the hard works.
>>The things that make people tired physically are the hard works.

2. Every people have their limit in their physical energy, and if they try to do more than that, they'll feel tired.
>>Every person has a limit on their physical energy, and if they try to do more than that, they'll feel tired.

3. And there is a lot of things that make people tired mentally.
>>Also, there are a lot of things that make people tired mentally.

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