¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What kinds of crimes are increasing?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Á¤*¾Æ
2024-06-26 1195

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Nowadays, crime of attacking women increases. Even middle of the day, it happens in the street. Most women are not strong physically, some men who has mental illness or unhappy to the society crime. The consciousness of opposition to women should be banned.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Ms. Angela! It is very saddening and outraging as well to hear such news. We hope that the government takes stronger action on this matter. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
Nowadays, crime of attacking women increases. 
>>Nowadays, violence against women increases.
Even middle of the day, it happens in the street.
>>Even in the middle of the day, it could happen on the streets.
Most women are not strong physically, some men who has mental illness or unhappy to the society crime. 
>>Most women are not physically strong so some mentally ill or unsound people commit such crime.
The consciousness of opposition to women should be banned.
>>These violence to women should be banned.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
133892 DIRECTIONS: Try to answer the tag questions shortly. ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 4
133891 Do you enjoy trying new foods, or do you prefer to stick to... Ȳ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 215
133890 What can you say about the generation gap? ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 588
133889 Lying doesn\'t make any value ÀÓ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 453
133888 Free Writing ±è*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 294
133887 What do you like most about IH? Share your answer in a few... ¼Û*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 1
133886 Do you think you will have a second date? ¼Û*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 1
133885 Free Writing ±è*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 292
133884 homework ±è*¸° ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 220
133883 Seoul ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 274
133882 essay 5 ¼Û*½Â ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 583
133881 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 373
133880 Survey ±Ç*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 5
133879 Letter ±Ç*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-15 2
133878 What is your opinion about \"Gender Equality\" ? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 2
133877 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 542
133876 How do you adapt to changes? ±Ç*ÀÓ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 0
133875 homework ±è*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 281
133874 >> What\'s your outlet when you\'re angry? Mention some of your... ÀÌ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 1
133873 Homework Àå*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-01-14 371

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04