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What kinds of crimes are increasing?

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Nowadays, crime of attacking women increases. Even middle of the day, it happens in the street. Most women are not strong physically, some men who has mental illness or unhappy to the society crime. The consciousness of opposition to women should be banned.

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Hello, Ms. Angela! It is very saddening and outraging as well to hear such news. We hope that the government takes stronger action on this matter. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
Nowadays, crime of attacking women increases. 
>>Nowadays, violence against women increases.
Even middle of the day, it happens in the street.
>>Even in the middle of the day, it could happen on the streets.
Most women are not strong physically, some men who has mental illness or unhappy to the society crime. 
>>Most women are not physically strong so some mentally ill or unsound people commit such crime.
The consciousness of opposition to women should be banned.
>>These violence to women should be banned.
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