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What are the things you enjoy most? Write at least two and explain.

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I things enjoy most is mobile games.
So I usually play with my friends everyday, I only play games that I always play.
I like Traditional games and sports games, too.
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Hi again, Yale!

I'm sending you back your corrected homework. Please go over the few corrections, such as the adverb "every day", which is different from the adjective "everyday". Also, there's no need to capitalize the word "traditional". Have a good one!  


Cheers,
Jean~~



                        
                       What are the things you enjoy most? Write at least two and explain.


I things enjoy most is mobile games.
>> The things I enjoy most are mobile games. 

So I usually play with my friends everyday, I only play games that I always play.
>> So I usually play with my friends every day, but I only play games that I always play.

I like Traditional games and sports games, too.
>> I like traditional games and sports games, too.
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