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Poor person\'s being successful

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According to an article, it is nearly impossible to move to higher positions in capitalism societies. But there are a few cases of vertical move. I think the best way is through higher education. Graduating from a good university and getting a professional job like a doctor gives a poor person an opportunity to be successful.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I totally agree with you! Although it is hard for poor people to become successful, there are still many success stories where they were able to overcome adversity and improve their situation. Just take note of the last sentence, I just added a comma before "like being a doctor" to make the sentence clearer.
-T. Caitlyn
According to an article, it is nearly impossible to move to higher positions in capitalism societies. 
>> CORRECT
But there are a few cases of vertical move. 
>> CORRECT
I think the best way is through higher education. 
>> CORRECT
Graduating from a good university and getting a professional job like a doctor gives a poor person an opportunity to be successful.
>> Graduating from a good university and getting a professional job, like being a doctor, gives a poor person an opportunity to be successful.
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