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In what ways does cultural background influence one\'s perception of casual attire?

작성자: 박*호
2024-06-25 460

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Cultural background includes the history, culture, religion, values, and economic conditions of the society in which an individual grows up and lives.
Therefore, cultural background naturally influences people's perceptions of casual attire.
The most representative examples are probably Islamic countries.
In Muslim countries, women must cover themselves from head to toe for religious reasons when going out .
In Korea, in the past, women were not allowed to wear clothes that exposed their legs or arms.
However, now that Western culture has spread throughout the world, including Korea, people can wear comfortable clothes freely.
However, these days, in Korea, men's clothing is a bit strict.
While women are allowed to wear both shorts and short skirts to informal gatherings, men are not allowed to wear shorts. Likewise, men should not wear shorts on the golf course.
This may be due to the cultural background that men must act responsibly.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good morning, Sun! 

A person's cultural background often shapes their clothing choices by reflecting traditions, values, and societal norms. Cultural influences can impact the styles, colors, and types of clothing people prefer, providing a sense of identity and connection to their heritage.

Cultural background includes the history, culture, religion, values, and economic conditions of the society in which an individual grows up and lives.
>> A person's cultural background include their background, lifestyle, values, religion, and the historical and cultural context of their community.
Therefore, cultural background naturally influences people's perceptions of casual attire.
>> Correct. 
Or >> Therefore, people's opinions about casual clothing are inevitably influenced by their cultural background.
The most representative examples are probably Islamic countries.
>> Correct. 
In Muslim countries, women must cover themselves from head to toe for religious reasons when going out .
>> Correct. 
In Korea, in the past, women were not allowed to wear clothes that exposed their legs or arms.
>> In the past, women in Korea were prohibited from wearing clothes that showed off their arms or legs.
However, now that Western culture has spread throughout the world, including Korea, people can wear comfortable clothes freely.
>> People are now free to dress however they like because Western culture has spread to every country, including Korea.
However, these days, in Korea, men's clothing is a bit strict.
>> On the other hand, men's clothing in Korea is still restrictive.
While women are allowed to wear both shorts and short skirts to informal gatherings, men are not allowed to wear shorts. 
>> For informal meetings, men are not permitted to wear shorts, but women are permitted to wear both short skirts and shorts.
Likewise, men should not wear shorts on the golf course.
>> Correct. 
This may be due to the cultural background that men must act responsibly.
>> The societal expectation that men behave properly could be the cause of this.
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