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Q. Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?


A. I never agree with the opinion. I believe that environment makes a person. Even though each human has their own natural inclination, They must be influenced by environment. It can draw out potential of people more positively to develope, but it also can weaken good tendency, too. Regardless of having good characteristic or not, if people have grown with good education, belief, and support from parents, the possibility to think and behave well would rise.

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Hi there Camille~! ^^Thanks for doing your essay! Well done! Your knowledge of the dispute and the events surrounding it shows in your essay. It is clear that you understand the main points of contention, and you have discussed these in an easily understood way. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
A. I never agree with the opinion.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I don't agree with statement.
 I believe that environment makes a person. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Even though each human has their own natural inclination, they must be influenced by the environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It can draw out potential of people more positively to develope, but it also can weaken good tendency, too.
>>>  It can draw out potential of people to positively develop, but it also can weaken good tendency.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Regardless of having good characteristic or not, if people have grown with good education, belief, and support from parents, the possibility to think and behave well would rise.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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