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The most important thing my parents taught us

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My father was very strict and didn't intervene parenting. He jut worked hard and sometimes intervened only when we had to make very important decisions like school, university and marriage.
So I think I was usually influenced by mom. My mom was very careful , thoughtful and wise. She tried not to damage someone. She wanted us to be polite without making any problems. She believed that if any other people blame us, we would be unfortunate. So she wanted us to grow up well and live happily by behaving well. She used to say that a virtuous person has no enemies. So she didn't ignore poor people and tried to help them.
My mom passed away 13 years ago, but I sometimes feel like she is still alive. It's maybe because I come up to my mom when something happens.
After my mother passed away, my father misses her and regrets not doing better for her.

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Hello, Ms. Ice! Thank you so much for sharing about the priceless things that you've learned from your parents.  I am also sorry to hear that such unfortunate thing happened. I appreciate you for taking time to write. Have a nice weekend!
-T. Sonny
My father was very strict and didn't intervene parenting. 
>>My father was very strict and didn't intervene in parenting.
He jut worked hard and sometimes intervened only when we had to make very important decisions like school, university and marriage.
>>He just worked hard and would only intervene when we had to make very important decisions mostly with school, university and marriage.
So I think I was usually influenced by mom. 
>>So, I think I was mostly influenced by mom.
My mom was very careful , thoughtful and wise. 
>>My mom was a very careful, thoughtful, and wise person.
She tried not to damage someone. 
>>She tried not to cause damage to someone.
She wanted us to be polite without making any problems. 
>>She wanted us to be well-mannered and not cause any trouble.
She believed that if any other people blame us, we would be unfortunate. 
>>She believed that if someone criticizes us, we would be unfortunate.
So she wanted us to grow up well and live happily by behaving well. 
>>So, she wanted us to grow up well and live happily by being well-behaved.
She used to say that a virtuous person has no enemies. 
>>CORRECT.
So she didn't ignore poor people and tried to help them.
>>So, she had never ignored unfortunate people and always extended help.
My mom passed away 13 years ago, but I sometimes feel like she is still alive. 
>>My mom passed away 13 years ago, but there are times when I feel like she's still here with us.
It's maybe because I come up to my mom when something happens.
>>Maybe, it's because I'd always come to my mom when things happens.
After my mother passed away, my father misses her and regrets not doing better for her.
>>Since my mother's passing, my father misses her and regrets not treating her better.
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