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If you were to recommend an amusement park, which one would you recommend and why?

>>> Although the best amusement park in korea is undoubtedly Everland in Yongin, I inwardly want to recommend E-world in Daegu. At first, there is the tallest gyrodrop in the Korea. Secondly, The whole space size of E-world is really proper. I think that the amusement park of which size is too big is not good to enjoy for a day. The small size is not needed to tell. Everyone can take all the rides in E-world for a day nevertheless there are too many people that day. Thirdly, there are many funny things except for rides. For example, there are ice skate link inside, auditorium, delicious restaurants and tower called "83tower". Fourthly, It is nice to date with love for these reasons. Whatever your purpose( ex. family picnic, date) for visiting the E-world, E-world is the best selection to you.

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Hello, Brian! This sounds great. The tallest gyro drop and its size do sound appealing, especially for a day trip. Plus, having other attractions like an ice skating rink and good dining options makes it versatile. Thanks for the recommendation! ^^
~ Teacher Maxine 

Although the best amusement park in korea is undoubtedly Everland in Yongin, I inwardly want to recommend E-world in Daegu. 
>> Although the best amusement park in Korea is undoubtedly Everland in Yongin, I inwardly want to recommend E-world in Daegu.

At first, there is the tallest gyrodrop in the Korea. 
>> Firstly, there is the tallest gyro drop in Korea.

Secondly, The whole space size of E-world is really proper. 
>> Secondly, the overall size of E-world is quite appropriate.

I think that the amusement park of which size is too big is not good to enjoy for a day. 
>> I think that an amusement park that is too big is not enjoyable for a day.

The small size is not needed to tell. 
>> The small size goes without saying.

Everyone can take all the rides in E-world for a day nevertheless there are too many people that day. 
>> Everyone can experience all the rides in E-world in a day, although there may be too many people on that day.

Thirdly, there are many funny things except for rides. 
>> Thirdly, there are many enjoyable attractions aside from rides.

For example, there are ice skate link inside, auditorium, delicious restaurants and tower called "83tower". 
>> For example, there is an ice skating rink inside, an auditorium, delicious restaurants, and a tower called "83 Tower."

Fourthly, It is nice to date with love for these reasons. 
>> Fourthly, it is a nice place for a romantic date for these reasons.

Whatever your purpose( ex. family picnic, date) for visiting the E-world, E-world is the best selection to you.
>> Whatever your purpose (e.g., family picnic, date) for visiting E-world, E-world is the best choice for you.
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