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What do you think is the most fun musical instrument to play? Why?

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I think the most fun musical instrument is guita because it's easy to learn, sounds good and guitar player is so nice.
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                        What do you think is the most fun musical instrument to play? Why?


I think the most fun musical instrument is guita because it's easy to learn, sounds good and guitar player is so nice.
>> I think the most fun musical instrument is the guitar because it is easy to learn, sounds good, and the guitar player looks cool. 

I want to play the guitar very well. 
>> OR: I hope to play the guitar superbly. 
>> OR: I hope to be a superb guitar player. 

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