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Promoting public transport as the primary means of transportation can have several advantages. Public transport generally emits less greenhouse gases per passenger compared to private vehicles, leading to reduced air pollution and improved air quality in cities. It also help alleviate traffic congestion, especially in densely populated urban areas. People can save their time if they take those transportation on time. It can be more cost-effective for individuals compared to owing a private vehicle which need to spend maintenance costs, fuel, an annual insurance fee and parking fees. On the other hand, private vehicles can offer comfort, privacy and flexibility in terms of route selection and timing. In addition, individuals who are living rural areas may have difficulties to use public transportation due to the high costs of investment. Government can't provide every routes for less populated areas. It may lead to housing price increases because everyone want to live the closesthouse

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