¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Positive giving up

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ¾ç*¿¬
2024-06-18 390

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

When I notice that what I am doing has no signs to improve or get well, I will give up the work. If there is something wrong in my health, I will also stop it quickly. No matter how much money I can make, I think it's better to give up if it harms my health. And for my loved family or friends I am willing to give up something.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Gi Yean!
I agree with you! Being stagnant at work and not learning anything can also make me give up on it. Also, when it concerns my health and my loved ones, those are probably the things that will make me give up things immediately.
- T. Caitlyn
When I notice that what I am doing has no signs to improve or get well, I will give up the work. 
>> When I notice that what I am doing shows no signs of improvement or getting better, I will give up the work.
If there is something wrong in my health, I will also stop it quickly. 
>> If there is something wrong with my health, I will also stop it quickly.
No matter how much money I can make, I think it's better to give up if it harms my health. 
>> CORRECT
And for my loved family or friends I am willing to give up something.
>> And for my beloved family or friends, I am willing to give up something.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
139058 What\'s the worst experience you\'ve had in your hometown? ÀÓ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-08-09 294
139057 8/9 writing task ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-09 2
139056 Homework ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-09 1
139055 Homework ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 2
139054 What are the advantages of using credit cards compared to cash? Áø*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 2
139053 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 4
139052 What was the most popular music when you were 12 years old, what... ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 344
139051 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 0
139050 HOMEWORK ÁÖ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 326
139049 [HW]What body language would you like your country to adopt? Why? °­*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 293
139048 The negative side on \" Should people become vegetarian? \" ¼Õ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 294
139047 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 1
139046 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 346
139045 What do you think of your class leaders? Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 321
139044 Popular car amongst peer ±è*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 323
139043 Writing task: What do you think is the most challenging role for... ±è*±â ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 313
139042 Having a conversation with native speakers of English ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 301
139041 Q) How can a person effectively prepare for a job interview? ÃÖ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 0
139040 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 282
139039 How do you handle problems when you encounter one? Çö* ¿Ï·á 2024-08-08 303

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04