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Positive giving up

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When I notice that what I am doing has no signs to improve or get well, I will give up the work. If there is something wrong in my health, I will also stop it quickly. No matter how much money I can make, I think it's better to give up if it harms my health. And for my loved family or friends I am willing to give up something.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I agree with you! Being stagnant at work and not learning anything can also make me give up on it. Also, when it concerns my health and my loved ones, those are probably the things that will make me give up things immediately.
- T. Caitlyn
When I notice that what I am doing has no signs to improve or get well, I will give up the work. 
>> When I notice that what I am doing shows no signs of improvement or getting better, I will give up the work.
If there is something wrong in my health, I will also stop it quickly. 
>> If there is something wrong with my health, I will also stop it quickly.
No matter how much money I can make, I think it's better to give up if it harms my health. 
>> CORRECT
And for my loved family or friends I am willing to give up something.
>> And for my beloved family or friends, I am willing to give up something.
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