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Who is the scariest person you know? Explain your answer.

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I think the scariest person is my teacher when I was in the 3rd grade.
First, he often get angry.
Second, he treats girls and boys unfairly.

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                                Who is the scariest person you know? Explain your answer.


I think the scariest person is my teacher when I was in the 3rd grade.
>> I think the scariest person was my teacher when I was in the 3rd grade.

First, he often get angry.
>> First, he often got angry.

Second, he treats girls and boys unfairly.
>> Second, he treated girls and boys unfairly.

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