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Can you cite some examples of these crimes? And how do you protect yourself from being a victim?

작성자: 김*경
2024-06-10 1220

회원님의 영작문

One of the most serious cyber-crimes is cyber-bullying taking an advantage of anonymity on line. We can find inherent suppressed cravings to blame others within us happen on line. Some people call others the names in a cyber-place which can’t pose responsibility because of it anonymity. But I am sure that they will fathom that blaming others for fun is not good for both parties, stopping their cyber-bullying.
Another cyber crime is to hacking others' information. We who’re getting used to cyber system are more likely to do through cyber space. For example, we do internet banking, or daily routines through smartphone. We almost can’t live without internet or smartphone, which means that our information or money can be more susceptible for hacking.
Therefore, we have to take some countermeasures preemptively against cyber hacking. First, we need to pay attention to cyber expert , second, we need to keep alert at cyber hacking through studying relevant information with many materials.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Steve! Thank you for giving this really informative and relevant response. I concur with all that you have mentioned. We should be more responsible with what we share online. Also, we have to think before we click. Anonymity is such a powerful tool for those who use technology for the wrong purpose. 
--teacher Anji



One of the most serious cyber-crimes is cyber-bullying taking an advantage of anonymity on line. 
>> One of the most serious cyber-crimes is cyber-bullying taking advantage of anonymity online.
We can find inherent suppressed cravings to blame others within us happen on line.
>> We can find inherent suppressed desire to blame others within us happen on line.
 Some people call others the names in a cyber-place which can’t pose responsibility because of it anonymity.
>>  Some people call others names in the cyber-place which can’t pose responsibility because of its anonymity. 
 But I am sure that they will fathom that blaming others for fun is not good for both parties, stopping their cyber-bullying.
>>  But I am sure that they will realize that blaming others for fun is not good for both parties, stopping their cyber-bullying.
Another cyber crime is to hacking others' information. 
>> Another cyber crime is hacking others' information. 
We who’re getting used to cyber system are more likely to do through cyber space. 
>>We,  who’re getting used to cyber system are more likely to do through cyber space. 
For example, we do internet banking, or daily routines through smartphone. 
>> CORRECT
We almost can’t live without internet or smartphone, which means that our information or money can be more susceptible for hacking.
>> CORRECT
Therefore, we have to take some countermeasures preemptively against cyber hacking.
>> CORRECT
 First, we need to pay attention to cyber expert ,
>>  First, we need to pay attention to cyber expert.
second, we need to keep alert at cyber hacking through studying relevant information with many materials.
>> second, we need to keep alert at cyber hacking through studying relevant information with a lot of materials.
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