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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of studying abroad?


These days, many people want to study abroad if they have a chance.
As far as I know, my country's education level is not low.
Nevertheless, the reason why many people choose to study abroad.
The reason why we can learn new culture, language, and lifestyle in abroad.
And through new experience, we can develop various opinions.
But, there are somethings make hesitant to study abroad.
A typical example is the money problem.
We already know well, the cost of studying abroad is not reasonable.
Even, if I go ti a western country, the cost of studying abroad will be more expensive.
Next cons is stress.
It's not easy to leave our hometown and live in abroad.
Because the language, culture, manners, and every things are different.
In severe cases, sometimes experience something like racism.
So, many people give up studying abroad because of stress.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of studying abroad?



These days, many people want to study abroad if they have a chance.
>> CORRECT!
As far as I know, my country's education level is not low.
>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, the reason why many people choose to study abroad.
>> Nevertheless, there are reasons why many people choose to study abroad.
The reason why we can learn new culture, language, and lifestyle in abroad.
>> One reason is that we can learn new cultures, language, and lifestyle abroad.
And through new experiences, we can develop various opinions.
>> CORRECT!
But, there are somethings make hesitant to study abroad.
>> But, there are some things that make someone hesitant to study abroad.
A typical example is the money problem.
>> CORRECT!
We already know well, the cost of studying abroad is not reasonable.
>> CORRECT!
Even, if I go to a western country, the cost of studying abroad will be more expensive.
>> CORRECT!
Next cons is stress.
>> CORRECT!
It's not easy to leave our hometown and live in abroad.
>> It's not easy to leave our hometown and live abroad.
Because the language, culture, manners, and every things are different.
>> That's because the language, culture, manners, and all things are different.
In severe cases, sometimes experience something like racism.
>> In severe cases, sometimes we experience something like racism.
So, many people give up studying abroad because of stress.
>> CORRECT!

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